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The wind of Junon threw back Aerith's brunet tendrils, her long braid swaying in the air. She placed her left hand above her brow line, shielding the sun's glare from her eyes as she peered up at the ship like a young child gazing at a long awaited gift. It was purely magnificent she thought. The airship was accompanied by a deep blue sky. It was truly an amazing sight to the cetra.

She had never gotten the chance to see something so amazing before and she wanted so badly to get on that airship and soar through the skies… but, she couldn't. Hours later, Aerith found herself wearing a SOLDIER's uniform, feeling the strong waves of the ocean rock her and the boat back and forth as they road to their next destination. This too was an experience she had never been through before. Not wanting to be found, Aerith decided to hide herself behind a few wooden crates below decks. After a while of sitting there, she heard heavy steps stop behind her.

"Hey," she heard a familiar voice call out to her, causing her to turn around and see Cloud standing behind her.

"Oh, Cloud! Did you see how big the airship at Junon was?" she chimed with a wide smile. Cloud crossed his arms and nodded; "…I heard it was big but I didn't expect it to be that big."

"Me either." Aerith giggled. And even though she still had her SOLDIER helmet on, as she laughed she covered her mouth with her hand—an action Cloud always loved watching her do.

"Hey, do you think I could ever get on it?" she buzzed sweetly, her finger now clicking against her chin as she pondered.

"Sure." Cloud said matter of factly.

"Can we even ride the airship together, Cloud?" Aerith asked, her voice holding more excitement now than before. Cloud saw Aerith place her hands behind her back, in the sweet way she always did, which he learned she always did when smiling. Without any hesitation, Cloud gently reached over to Aerith and removed her helmet, uncovering her face and revealing the smile he held so dear.

Suddenly, the stoic Ex-Soldier couldn't say no.

"No matter what it takes, we'll ride it together." He said back, a weak smile on his face.

"Promise?" Aerith chimed, leaning forward with her hands hidden behind her as she gazed up at him.

"Promise." Cloud murmured back, looking forward to the day he could fulfill his promise to his flower girl.

» Couple: Cloud x Aerith
» Theme: fluff, romance, cute, sweet, in game
» Rating: PG
» Word count: 421
» fanfic.net link: P r o m i s e

So, I wrote this back in April of 2011 but I wanted to put it up here now. It's set in game during the Highwind promise scene between Cloud and Aerith. I hope you enjoy it. ^_^

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Outfoxed Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice little vignette.



A few pointers for future writing endeavours:

-'Me either' -> 'Me neither' (or 'Neither did I' if you're feeling formal).

-Always break paragraphs when the speaker changes, even if it's just a sentence of one or two words.

-Be sparing in your use of adverbs. Despite what some writers might tell you, they are not evil, but they are open to abuse.

-'matter-of-factly' should be hyphenated (or omitted altogether).
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CaliforniaBabeWV Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
Thank you for reading and thank you for the review. I do try to break paragraphs, and I know I'm suppose to, but I hate how it looks on dA. Thank you for the pointer on adverbs. I tend to get quite wordy, and when I'm not people usually comment how not enough was used. 

Thank you again! :)
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Outfoxed Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, yes. I'd forgotten about DA's wonderful submission system. Any formatting troubles notwithstanding, I thought this was quite a nice little piece.

Anyway, best of luck with your future writing endeavours. Cheers.
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Snowflower--Chan00 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013   Writer
I love it!
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CaliforniaBabeWV Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
Oh, thank you so much, sug! I'm so happy you enjoyed it. Love 
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Snowflower--Chan00 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013   Writer
Please make more!!! :tighthug: I'll make a cute story about Cloud and Aerith soon. ^^ I think it will be a belated Halloween themed one. I'm just so freaking busy with school so it will be later. :glomp:
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Dakk-Tribal Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. I love it.^^
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CaliforniaBabeWV Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
D'aww thank you ♥
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